7 thoughts on “haiku”

1. 

   That is not a haiku.
   A haiku has 17 syllables.
   line 1-5 syllables
   line 2-7 syllables
   line 3-5 syllables

2. 

   jeeter. your rebuke
   last 3 lines perfect haiku
   off one syllable

3. 

   also: this is not haiku:

   blue blue blue blue blue
   tree tree tree tree tree tree tree
   leaf leaf leaf leaf leaf

4. 

   if you want to get technical, original japanese haiku is written in one line. but modern american haiku writers such as jack kerouac, richard wright, sonia sanchez (and many others) did not even follow the “traditional” 5-7-5 syllabic pattern, but were more concerned with capturing the essence of the original form. ie:

   Snow in my shoe
   Abandoned
   Sparrow’s nest
   -jack kerouac

5. 

   The idea of a haiku is to state much more than is literally said using only seventeen syllables.

6. 

   This isn’t a haiku because nothing is actually being said other than what’s written.

   blue blue blue blue blue
   tree tree tree tree tree tree tree
   leaf leaf leaf leaf leaf

7. 

   i dont know… sometimes i when i read that poem I get the feeling that the tree might be welcoming me to its most serene spot…