if you want to get technical, original japanese haiku is written in one line. but modern american haiku writers such as jack kerouac, richard wright, sonia sanchez (and many others) did not even follow the “traditional” 5-7-5 syllabic pattern, but were more concerned with capturing the essence of the original form. ie:
Snow in my shoe
Abandoned
Sparrow’s nest
-jack kerouac
That is not a haiku.
A haiku has 17 syllables.
line 1-5 syllables
line 2-7 syllables
line 3-5 syllables
jeeter. your rebuke
last 3 lines perfect haiku
off one syllable
also: this is not haiku:
blue blue blue blue blue
tree tree tree tree tree tree tree
leaf leaf leaf leaf leaf
if you want to get technical, original japanese haiku is written in one line. but modern american haiku writers such as jack kerouac, richard wright, sonia sanchez (and many others) did not even follow the “traditional” 5-7-5 syllabic pattern, but were more concerned with capturing the essence of the original form. ie:
Snow in my shoe
Abandoned
Sparrow’s nest
-jack kerouac
The idea of a haiku is to state much more than is literally said using only seventeen syllables.
This isn’t a haiku because nothing is actually being said other than what’s written.
blue blue blue blue blue
tree tree tree tree tree tree tree
leaf leaf leaf leaf leaf
i dont know… sometimes i when i read that poem I get the feeling that the tree might be welcoming me to its most serene spot…